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    dots Submission Name: Sullen Woodsdots
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    Author: PaulHudson
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Southend, Essex
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 70/71/19
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       I live opposite a small wood. Woods always have a unique sense of presence about them. Everything is alive, organic but organised and logical, it's a small system of plants, trees, seeds, birds, squirrels and the odd badger. We go in, see, smell, hear and you really do 'come out' of them like waking from a trance. I don't say it to be poetic, that's how it feels.

    Here's me in a wood stripped bare by autumn.


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    dotsSullen Woodsdots
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    Trodden dirt and thread bare grass
    Silent pools, silty, stagnant past
    Blotched skys move no where fast
    suns glowing warmth has past

    Squirrels search for acrons to retreive
    From tied branches, bare of leafs
    While birds flick about the ground
    their aurgent hunt without a sound

    Wonderful washed and sullen woods
    about which, I am stood. 




    Submitted on 2011-04-12 19:38:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      by the way...

    one of the best Titles for a poem...

    "Sullen Woods"

    wonderful.
    | Posted on 2011-04-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i think after so many failed relationships...we tend to stand still in the middle of a sullen woods...and all the sounds, once so beautiful, become a depressing din...that hurts our ears as well as our hearts.

    careful of spellings...they are unwanted stops...but a really nice tight piece..visual and stuff...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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