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    dots Submission Name: Empty Beddots
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    Author: disturbed631
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/2
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       For my Miss Bunny


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    dotsEmpty Beddots
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    She throws the pillows
    She takes the covers
    She clears the bed
    When she's around
    The bed's never empty
    My arms are never empty
    We toss and turn
    Shake the bed
    I'm a fucking furnace
    She always says

    These next two weeks
    Are full of Nothing
    'Cause my bed is missing something
    The sheets are there
    The blankets are mine
    the pillows are fine

    These next two weeks
    Are going to be Hell
    'Cause even though
    the bed is there
    There is one crucial piece missing
    and she's all mine
    without her in my arms
    Hogging the covers
    and throwing the pillow
    It will always be just an
    empty bed




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