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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: disturbed631
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/2
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I miss my dream girl:(


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    dotsDreamdots
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    The reason I never dream
    is not what it seems
    'Cause a dream is beautiful
    a dream is wonderful

    The past fews years
    I've always wondered
    Why I can't dream
    All I see is the dark
    But being alone in the dark
    Proved to help
    Help to see what my true
    dreams are about
    I now know
    And know for the best
    The reason I don't
    dream is one of the best

    The dream itself is a beautiful thing
    But not just a thing
    It's a beautiful woman
    A dream forms
    There is no better way to have it
    The one I've always loved
    The one I've always wanted to hold

    But I don't have to sleep
    to have this dream
    'cause everyday with her
    is a
    DREAM




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      Well written, and very expressional in a sense where it touches everyone! good work! :)
    | Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by blossomswilt | [ Reply to This ]


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