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    dots Submission Name: What i've learneddots
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    Author: AshleyDYoung
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 28/33/34
    Words: 429
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 454
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2263



    Description:
       this is an autobiographical poem


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    dotsWhat i've learneddots
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    I opened my eyes and set my sights on a beautiful world,
    but soon I realized at a young age that darkness existed.
    I learned what pain was, I learned from the hunger
    gnawing at my ribs. I learned from the lust in their eyes.
    I learned from the feel of their hard fists and old beds
    of which I slept. I learned from the bugs
    that inhabited my hair, I learned from the loneliness.
    Up you the age of five a learned to survive


    I was saved, but not by a valet knight but family.
    As we all know life is not full of fairy tale endings though.
    I soon learned abandonment; I learned that one
    who is supposed to love can have a firm fist.
    I learned how to survive on small to no food or water.
    I learned kids can be cruel
    even when your life is not in your control.
    I learned how to steal from those I love
    so I could survive another day.
    I lay in my own feces to sleep or was not allowed to rest at all.
    I was made promises that were never kept,
    from the ages of six till eleven I learned not to trust.


    And then I moved into a home that was warm and welcoming,
    but I was already too far gone. I fell into my own darkness,
    recreating all the nightmares of which I had lived through,
    and had a strong thirst for pain, of which I soon began to inflict on myself with a blade.
    From age’s eleven till fifth teen I learned that even in a room full of people I love I was alone.


    I tried to fix myself and my life changed again,
    I kept to myself learning lessons I had already been taught…
    but then I became sixteen and the lessons started again.
    I then entered a world of “puppies, and fairy tales”
    needless to say I fell in love. This is where I learned the greatest lesson of all,
    I learned not to love. I learned that in the end loneliness is my only friend.
    I learned to love with every piece of myself and afterwards found out I was stupid.
    Now I sit here today on my twentieth birthday looking back on everything I’ve learned. I realize that I am numb.




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