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    dots Submission Name: Our Love (Pt. 1)dots

    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 548
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOur Love (Pt. 1)dots

    This is the only story of our life
    With me being your wife

    We whisper those sweet words
    Despite falling down the stairs
    And tripping on the pills

    Its just another night
    For another fight

    When the blinds are pulled
    And our emotions are cold

    A heartless sight
    With secrets so tight

    Maybe its the thrill of the hunt
    Or you calling me a cunt

    That gets me to simply fight
    In this candle-light

    And in the moment of the heat
    We fuck like animals when we got laid
    Waving around the bills cause we got paid

    Just go back and shove me
    In this aftermath of degree

    Underlying the destruction
    Without the seduction
    And the Instruction

    On what to do during this battle
    And just another sequence of the pattern

    You are my favorite hero
    Even when you lost your mind
    And this kindness is hard to find

    In the aftermath of my anger
    And this argument we are tangled
    When all we want to do is strangle

    Covered in the bruises you left
    And the broken bones you caused
    That screams out my flaws

    So this is another story of our life
    As if its cutting into us like a knife

    You can have a sense of sympathy
    Even though I dont expect empathy

    When you refuse to let me leave
    And I have to say I never did see

    When you struck me in your anger
    And it left another mark under my eye
    When you cover it up with another lie

    Now its our emotions in heat
    That causes me to cheat

    When we do what we do
    And they say that it only takes two

    We're going another round
    Without making another sound

    Tonight, we're at it again
    Our pain written just as plain
    And your words are in vain

    This is an on-going war
    When you swear I'm a whore

    To condemn me of this scheme
    You take to the new extremes
    And it seems to follow a theme

    Over in my mind, I could have swore
    And I'll admit, I'm just too sore

    To even show one bit of care
    When this fight was never fair

    As my confidence drained
    When I'm in nothing but pain

    Scream at me with an undermining glare
    And I swear I wont back down with any fear

    As my blood-matted hair
    Tells a story that's not even rare
    When I tell nothing but lies, you swear

    So beware and dont even compare
    When I prove you right in this affair

    The walls are prepared
    To be repaired

    When your fist makes contact
    And not surprised at the compact

    I love you just doesn't cut
    And my mouth is just shut

    And my silent words
    Are slurred when they aren't heard

    I dont have a split lip
    And you didn't flip

    This is my rhyme
    As I reached my prime
    Without committing a crime

    So I'm ending this verse
    Without the worse

    And our walls went up in smoke
    As if our life was an old joke

    Submitted on 2011-04-14 11:47:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a good account of a bad experience,,
    | Posted on 2011-04-14 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]

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