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    dots Submission Name: Ravagingdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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    Can you see this disease?
    Can you see it eating away at me slow bit by bit
    Taking what it wishes when it pleases
    Do you see my blood shot eyes or my slim body frame?
    I wonder how much longer till it will take me entirely
    I beg for it to leave me, but this simply is not possible
    For this disease in all reality are the demons I refuse to acknowledge
    This space you always see me confide to is the prison that has built, all thanks to these demons
    I cannot forgive those who have hurt me in unspeakable ways
    Therefore I will forever be controlled
    I cannot forget, if I could then I’d be sleeping right now at 3am rather than writing out my frustrations out.

    Submitted on 2011-04-14 21:31:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ow...being imprisoned by our demons...hard way to be...somehow the key got thrown away...and we are left there to rot in our anger...the voice you hear in my pen is not mine anymore..it is theirs...

    i am no longer me...death would be better than life imprisonment.
    | Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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