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    dots Submission Name: Writer's Blockdots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 75/295/165
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWriter's Blockdots
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    Words once had flowed so naturally
    Springing forth at will or a whim
    Lately, they're all brittle and forced
    Creations of a mind on fire

    Everything is fleeting and empty
    I'm viewing the world through dark glasses
    Peeling off the skin to reveal the bruise beneath
    Is the only accurate description of me.

    All of these notes resound violently
    The music within a fragmented being
    Poisoning others with venom and anti-freeze
    Subdural hematoma- hemorrhaging memories




    Submitted on 2011-04-15 00:12:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      can't believe this one also has not gotten more comments...ridiculous!
    | Posted on 2011-04-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      the fire is the anti-freeze

    wow, poisoning others...

    i feel my words being brittle and forced...

    the last stanza is a killer literally and figuratively..

    and you have three stanzas that feel separate, like they don't go together...

    but that works here...shows the brittle, forced nature of the poem....
    like you are just trying to get something out...

    you are fragmented like the thoughts in the three stanzas which don't exactly match..

    and the hemorraging....memories...really good phraseology...

    i always have found that when i have writer's block...writing about it is the best way to undam the words...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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