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    dots Submission Name: somthing always stay the samedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 599
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    Bytes: 924



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    dotssomthing always stay the samedots
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    Every Day is a new day
    Every Day somethings changes
    But one thing will always stay the same.....

    Talk, sleep, and eat
    There's nothing but you on the brain
    No type of retardant can distinguish this flame

    She's that type of woman,
    You give your last name too
    Knowing tomorrow
    She will still be calling
    Late at night saying she loves you.

    Intellectual mind
    With a body that so exquisitely fine
    Hearing that voice
    Has the heart ready for internal combustion

    She everything you want and need
    As days go by,
    She is the girl of your dreams,
    taking away every breath away
    with every sensual kiss.
    i could die today
    i know i would be at rest.

    Forever and Always
    I wanted to thank you for giving me the time





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    ||| Comments |||
      ive heard those words before... the whole i cant stop thinking about you, i cant just leave you alone. those are prbly the hardest words a girl can hear after that same guy kicks her to the curb. good write tho.
    | Posted on 2011-04-17 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write. Very good contents and beautiful narration. I can see the burning of the flame inside. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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