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    dots Submission Name: Cuddling Depressiondots
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    Author: AshleyDYoung
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 28/33/34
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsCuddling Depressiondots
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    When I awake every morning,
    depression greets me at the door with open arms.
    He’s holding my morning paper,
    and fixing the coffee.
    The smell fills my empty house.
    I eat breakfast
    he watches,
    I listen to the nagging and demeaning screams of people who I love,
    which of course makes him smile even more.
    their words tearing me up inside,
    and making what little self confidence I once had diminish.
    I feel like giving up, which he also enjoys.
    So I get into my car alone,
    with him in the passenger seat and drive.
    When I return home I crawl into bed,
    him by my side.




    Submitted on 2011-04-15 23:23:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the personification of "depression" works well here...constantly by your side...

    so sad for the speaker of the poem...when her only friend is depression...he follows, clings, talks to her...the only one she can turn to...

    nicely done
    | Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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