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    dots Submission Name: To Joshua (Prologue)dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    16/male/spirit
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 114/149/192
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Longing
    Total Views: 250
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 832



    Description:
       I was just hangin' around and suddenly got an idea about a girl who's realized something very important about herself...
    then I started writing, and the ideas just came to me.

    Imagine you're her. Imagine you're talking to the camera yourself.
    The spaces, the expression.
    It's real.


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    dotsTo Joshua (Prologue)dots
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    She just sits there, in front of her laptop. The light on the top of the screen was blue.
    The camera was on,
    so she starts to speak.
    "For once...in my life...
    I see...I see I'm not..." she lets go of a breath she didn't know she held.
    "I'm not exactly what I thought I was...I mean, how I was.
    I'm not a...a saint.
    I'm not as great...at everything that-as I thought I was good at...
    I'm..." She can't hold her breath. She keeps spacing out.
    "I'm not who you think I am. I'm messed up.
    I'm not that perfect dream girl...
    and I know this.
    I've lied. And I mean all my life, I've been a liar...
    and I'm sorry..."
    And the camera is turned off.




    Submitted on 2011-04-16 14:16:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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