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    dots Submission Name: Searching...dots

    Author: ShiveringFire
    Elite Ratio:    4.9 - 328/84/22
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 866
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Pardon me my love,
    As this body now refuses to restrain
    Such a fiery, blazing soul.

    All this imprecision
    This absence of definition
    Flashes like a sword, time and again
    Fairly unsheathed, yet unable to kill
    Trapped in a duel against its own self.

    Indifferent to this all
    I am here to violate the scroll
    Your world calls destiny

    Pardon me, my love
    But my existence presupposes yours
    And you were not meant to be lost
    In the shadows of hermeneutics
    In the winds of perceptions
    All crashing against a long, unyielding pause.

    My dear, I am not here to be your anchor
    I have chosen to be your mast
    Gladly, I have left behind all horizons
    To search for the real voice
    That was originally spoken
    Much before it was ever heard.

    Submitted on 2011-04-16 16:00:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this peice. It has a quality to it that I can not describe. This is wonderful I can't wait for your next peice.
    | Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      not that the body cannot restrain the soul but that it refuses to...that's significant, it explains what follows in the poem.... Why the speaker is different with regards to her actions. So different she has to apologize.
    | Posted on 2011-04-23 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      God Bless you Shiv, and you will find what you are looking for.

    Well you certainly had the dart aimed perfectly didn't you.The last stanza caught me before knowing that it was meant to do that or any knowledge of it's placing.

    | Posted on 2011-04-21 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      "i am here to violate the scroll"

    i am an out of body experience waiting to be written...and you cannot stop me..

    my voice presupposes you...

    the dear could be the muse...i am not going to be your anchor, hold you down...i am going to sail full speed ahead...
    i leave behind all horizons to search for the real voice...

    the poet understands---the voice is innate...even if unspoken, the voice exists..it is just waiting to be unleashed...

    wonder why i didn't see this one before, and why there are not more comments on it...

    destiny maybe...i like the flippant nature of "the scroll / your world calls destiny"

    that is very much the poet...seeing things far above and in between the norm...

    i like this.

    | Posted on 2011-04-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this:

    "I have chosen to be your mast
    Gladly, I have left behind all horizons
    To search for the real voice
    That was originally spoken
    Much before it was ever heard."

    Genius incorporates all of the knowledge that one possesses, including learned knowledge, subconscious memory, and primitive intelligence stored at a cellular level. I believe you are trusting genius, and expressing indifference to dictum and social dogmas, which is excellent. True courage starts with trusting one's genius and following it.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2011-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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