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    dots Submission Name: In the Momentdots

    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 542
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsIn the Momentdots

    Up on that stage
    Without the feel of a cage

    Let your worries fly
    And your doubts tie

    Listen. Respect. See

    It' like the lost key
    Without involving the fee

    Close your thoughts
    Silence your morals

    Allow the beat to take you higher
    Till your adrenaline tires

    Boy, leave your ego at the door
    And keep your feet on the floor

    I can say, she doesn't move for you
    Without pay, she wouldn't be made a fool

    Discriminate without a voice
    Admirable is her choice

    Before you have to dismantle her name
    Remember the fame that came
    When it's your name that's in shame

    Let her do what's best
    When her ways are set

    So watch her
    Since she's so sure

    Twirling in fluid motion
    Without any commotion
    When there is nothing but devotion

    Swirling in perfect sin
    Without showing any skin
    Upon doing that perfect spin

    Up on that stage
    Within minimum wage

    Without any fear
    But plenty of care

    Submitted on 2011-04-17 18:41:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Is this supposed to be a rap?
    | Posted on 2011-04-20 00:00:00 | by IlakSorirn | [ Reply to This ]
      Its a really good poem
    | Posted on 2011-04-20 00:00:00 | by Hardy | [ Reply to This ]

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