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    dots Submission Name: a night of conflictdots

    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsa night of conflictdots

    and i know that's what i seem to
    desire as a pyramid to tutankhamen's
    eyes lined with kohl and coal covered
    fingers cupping flame to ceiling asking
    asking what all those symbols mean
    when everything can be taken
    out of context and eventualities
    which never quite eventuate
    how you will it
    to be

    and i sold my palms
    to the closest fortune-teller
    willing me empresses and rivers
    and rabbit-holes into my wonderland
    where conversation is a silent motionless
    enterprise of saffron and silk and
    rustling curvatures implying
    bodies dancing and living and laughing
    and searching for the next
    little thing

    and i on the mezzanine and i
    in a hallway circumventing solutions
    mapped out by cartesian thinkers
    by encyclopaedic memories and notes
    and notes and more fruitless misconceptions
    given salt and pepper
    to taste

    i want all of this to crumble
    for hieroglyphics to bathe in
    green currents green melodies
    in silver solutions
    inseeming and insoluble
    inscrutable and enchanting

    Submitted on 2011-04-18 04:38:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      @@c-Street Corner@@
    Brenda Hillman

    There was an angle

    where I went for

    centuries not as a

    self or feature but

    exhaled as a knowing

    brick tradesmen engineered for

    blunt or close recall;

    soundly there, meanings grew

    past a second terror

    finding their way as

    evenings, hearing the peppermint

    noise of sparrows landing

    like spare dreams of

    citizens where abstraction and

    the real could merge.

    We had crossed the

    red forest; we had

    recognized a weird lodge.

    We could have said

    song outlasts poetry, words

    are breath bricks to

    support the guardless singing

    project. We could have

    meant song outlasts poetry.

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