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    dots Submission Name: Broken Hearteddots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Fanfic/I hate you
    Total Views: 622
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    dotsBroken Hearteddots
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    I admit I am wrong for my actions
    I should not have... Yet I did
    Now I ask you where do you stand in all of this?
    Are you somehow justified in your actions
    Is there some simple explanation
    To why you have left my heart broken & bleeding on the ground next to your feet.
    How could have I ever been so naive enough to believe you loved me
    When did my heart over-rule my mind?
    How did I even allow those walls to come down?

    You will not see these tears
    No I will not allow you to have the satisfaction to see the pain you have caused me
    I will never show you emotions of tendering loving, care again
    From here on out we will have a "Room Mate" relationship...
    No longer lovers
    No longer in "Love"
    You have killed this part of me




    Submitted on 2011-04-18 04:57:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Glad to see you still writing jackz, I like the feeling included of the anger and seclusion that comes with being hurt, cause hiding the hurt is hard, but you CANT let anyone see it, well that might br my Irish side talking, good piece keep it up

    L.O.
    | Posted on 2011-04-19 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah how I hate the broken hearted feeling. Such sorrow and pain only make good for poetic inspiration. I'm truly sorry such a wonderfully written poem has to grow from the ashes of a torched love.
    I hope you mend quickly.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading

    H
    | Posted on 2011-04-19 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your poem, i feel your pain i really do i just had that happen to me last week
    | Posted on 2011-04-18 00:00:00 | by AshleyRox1 | [ Reply to This ]


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