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    dots Submission Name: You got itdots
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    Author: AshleyRox1
    ASL Info:    18/f/Pierce, NE, YUCK
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 5/36/26
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 506
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 633



    Description:
       This is a poem don't even fuck with it..comment if you want but don't be negative. Just read.

    This is what happens when a girl fucks with me


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    The blood on my hands
    The broken nose...I did that to you.
    Damn I feel good about it.
    You don't look so hot after i fucked you up.
    Hmmm maybe this is warning
    This is what i call a good fight
    You deserved this bitch
    You were just given a warning
    The next one isn't gonna be a warning
    For your sake i hope there won't be a next time
    You think my poems have to rhyme...they don't they don't even have to make sense.
    You got the broken nose and i didn't get shit done to me.
    I just have the blood covering my hands.




    Submitted on 2011-04-18 16:17:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It had to feel much better after writing this... I wish I could get that ahhhhhh its out! feeling.

    People will always [censored] with you... that's just life. They feel bigger and better while spouting useless [censored]... and advising.

    You keep writing and you just keep sharpening your blade... You'll be a warrior poet in no time, and you'll stomp all over their pretty little flowery words.
    | Posted on 2011-04-30 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      BAM! The anger drips off the screen with this one. I'd hate to be on your bad side. I know the feeling.
    This was written very well.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading

    H
    | Posted on 2011-04-19 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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