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    dots Submission Name: The Lyrical Hold, A Million Dollars Story, Danced dots

    Author: mslyricvixen
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2/0/11
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Story/Broken
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    dotsThe Lyrical Hold, A Million Dollars Story, Danced dots

    The Lyrical Hold, A Million Dollars Story, Danced by a Marionette

    the manipulating privilege of possession
    is all yours
    i do not prevent my undue bending knee
    but, place it where it is forced
    enclose in its captivity
    are swan like performances
    dancing as a Marionette
    flowing in a air of blood stained counted measurements
    with graceful silent nightmares of custom influences
    raw shaking wings can not take
    to heavenly Flight
    but are now cursed and weaken
    by Celebrity like demonic god, admirers
    hovering over a lifeless non-moving string puppet

    pull me this way, and i lift my arm
    wiggle me this way
    and i will, scream out no alarm
    dress me as, cute as a clown
    hand on back, neck held straight
    and i will certainly dance it your way
    lyric to lyric, cheek to cheek
    held in a million dollar captivity
    for not one single soul to see


    Submitted on 2011-04-20 06:58:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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