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    dots Submission Name: The Seafarer~Based on "The Prophet" dots

    Author: chrls
    ASL Info:    43/m/louisiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 43/56/16
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Seafarer~Based on "The Prophet" dots

    As the mist clears I see my ship come to take me home.
    It's been twelve long years. Days of pain and nights alone.

    But I go in sorrow not without regret. I'll be gone tomorrow; my eagerness with sails full set.

    In the city I heard their souls cry out as one.
    The elders then spoke: "Go not yet away our son."

    "You gave us dreams to dream and songs to sing."
    "We would ask of you." "Speak to us of everything."

    I spoke for hours.
    My voice caressed their ears.
    I spoke of joyous times and brought to life their fears.

    But overpateint has my captain been.
    In the twilight coming we will all meet again.

    Submitted on 2011-04-22 18:21:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       I see a fellow who's time is up and now must move on to the hereafter.
    Our days on earth are few, the time to think about the future lies in our past.
    This was a good poem, forgive me if your theme was misunderstood.
    | Posted on 2011-04-22 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]

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