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    dots Submission Name: Requiem For A Dreamdots
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    Author: RequiemOfDreams
    ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 97/140/38
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1681
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1235



    Description:
       Inspired by Requiem for a Dream- you gotta see the movie for this piece to make perfect sense. Other than that you can only piece things together.


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    dotsRequiem For A Dreamdots
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    Pain overbearing, fiery numbness
    Cold sweat pouring, drenching
    Wanna be home, wanta return
    Golden age awaits, I wanna return
    Life was simpler, simpler was better

    Rage tears my arm to pieces...

    Golden age lasted, til the bread left the basket
    Crimson liquid ruined the golden hue
    A new hunger consumes my body

    Guilt for her floods my eyes...

    Last chance to become golden
    No energy to keep holding
    Words I said to her were painful
    "I'll return today baby, today"
    With no truth spoken
    Music beings to play, no return today
    My call falls on bleeding ears
    Golden light fades away

    Life is crazy, more so for mom
    Whose dream she did not know
    To star on TV she thought
    Just my continuing love she didn't know
    See her again, I cannot

    I see my friend, cuddling alone
    He is tough on the outside
    He bleeds on the inside
    Remembrance of days past
    Comforts him while he sleeps
    He dreams, of a better time

    I lie in bed, my arm is lost
    I lie in bed, is my life lost?




    Submitted on 2004-07-29 03:07:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well, I have seen the movie. and I have to say it stuck in my mind pretty long. a really depressing movie. and you've captured it pretty well. seems like you've gotten into his mind. there's not really something to criticize cause it's a really good piece. but I think you have to know the movie to understand it.
    | Posted on 2004-07-29 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well one of the greatest movies of all time and I like the way you tryed to explain *Harry's* mind. The poem it self wasn't too poetic, well it was, but at the same time it wasn't lol. Dont mind me...but good write!

    Bruno
    | Posted on 2004-07-29 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]


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