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    dots Submission Name: To the Parents from the Newborndots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       i wrote this as a present to my husband from our daughter for valentine's day.


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    dotsTo the Parents from the Newborndots
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    There once was a babe who lived in the trees
    The tiniest thing that you'd ever seen
    In heaven she lived, and danced in the forests
    She imagined she sang with the angel chorus
    Then God told her that her time had come
    "Your parents are waiting, my dear little one"
    So He went to the tree to help her down
    "Why must I leave?" she asked with a frown
    The Maker smiled at the precious child
    "You will understand, my dear, in awhile
    There's someone down there who you will love
    Your presence will bring them peace like a dove
    It won't all be easy, that much is true,
    But this is part of my plan for you.
    The mommy who gives you life today
    Will help you wipe your tears away
    The daddy who one day leads you down the aisle
    Will laugh with joy when he sees your smile"
    The babe pondered this as she felt chagrined
    Knowing her new life was about to begin
    Taking His hand, which felt so strong
    She knew at once that He was not wrong
    As she grew up here on the earth
    It was her daddy who gave her this warmth
    The strong hands that held her when she would cry
    And helped pick her up after a failed try
    With this, daddy, I want you to know
    That I will love you, wherever I go




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      thank you both for the input! i actually had someone tell me once that before you are born, you know everything about yourself and even get to choose your parents. but just before you come out, an angel tells you that you will not remember anything from heaven or that you chose the family, then gives you a kiss and you are born. the little cleft above your lip is thus called the angel's kiss by this legend. i heard that shortly before writing this story, kind of using that as the perspective for the piece. anywho, thanks again!
    | Posted on 2011-04-24 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      I would have had to tear up if I received something like that. Children are your universe on feet.
    | Posted on 2011-04-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      this is simple...but sometimes simple does the trick...this is a very touching piece...

    a universal theme and a different perspective from the baby's viewpoint...

    perhaps they know more than we think they know when they arrive.
    | Posted on 2011-04-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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