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    dots Submission Name: waiverdots

    Author: skinnydrew
    Elite Ratio:    2.9 - 5/8/11
    Words: 312
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The world as cold as ice
    To much noise to hear ones thoughts.
    Blood shed and panic
    A mother covering her child's ears
    From the terrifying screams.

    Will this ever end
    Can we have peace and be friends?
    Am I just sleeping, a nightmare maybe.
    But it all is too real.
    Will I come back?
    Is there a place to come back to.

    The fear grows and life slows.
    I see clouds and lights.
    I hear screams and shouts.
    But I just cannot move.
    A figure comes

    A tank, a car.
    The distance is to far.
    Til the image gets closer
    And its my friend from this war.
    He tries to speak I see him talk
    But all is in thought.

    He leans over as to give a hug
    As I'm flung over his shoulder
    Like a common rug.
    I try to speak
    But words don't come.

    My fears are stronger.
    Am I here anymore
    Is this my death.
    The shouting continues as I hold my breath
    I know now what happened
    I see the blood drip.

    A life unlived
    Unchosen and unwanted.
    I did what I had to
    Everything I was told.
    What about my love ones
    To them I was sold.

    War has no end
    Good or bad
    But I have an ending.
    That might make one sad.
    As my comrade set me down
    In the cold black bag.

    I thought of those lives
    The ones I ended?
    Did the deserve to die
    Did I have that right.
    This would never happen
    If we would look past the greed

    We say in God we trust
    But would God trust us.
    I signed my life away
    With a pen and paper
    Never again to say a word
    Or write my love another letter.

    Submitted on 2011-04-24 17:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Death. Is it his ghost that writes?...wow!
    Yeah, if we can sign off our lives, then God can't even trust us with it.

    (You should write God with a capital G).
    | Posted on 2011-04-26 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]

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