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    Author: skinnydrew
    Elite Ratio:    2.9 - 5/8/11
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I don't care
    I never cared
    I won't care.
    But something happened
    It changed my life
    I felt something new
    Something I can never forget
    For once in my life it was more than just me
    You came in my life
    And your there to say
    You make me laugh
    And sometimes cry
    I wish I was better
    I wish I was stronger
    I didn't know it was so easy to care
    But no one told me
    That it also hurts to care.
    I haven't seen you
    It's been over a week
    I miss your laugh
    And your healing hugs
    I wish you were older
    So you can understand
    Why I am not there
    And that it hurts when I'm not.
    I love you so much
    And I always will
    You taught me to care
    And changed who I was.
    I am better now
    I thought something was wrong
    But I found what it was
    And it was all you.
    I will never be gone
    I might not be around
    But know that I'm here
    And I always will be
    I started out bad
    But all that has changed
    Now I will care
    I have cared
    And I do care.




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      Interesting how it starts with 'I don't care, I never cared, I won't care' and ends with 'Now i will care, I have cared, I do care'....It's like one's life story in a few words.....that's poetry.
    | Posted on 2011-04-25 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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