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    dots Submission Name: Dartaniandots
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    Author: skinnydrew
    Elite Ratio:    2.9 - 5/8/11
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDartaniandots
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    So small and fragile
    Curious and agile
    Fun and funny
    Always loving
    My little monkey
    My heart and soul
    I'm sorry I can't take you
    They wouldn't let you go
    My precious
    My life
    My anything and everything
    My every thought
    My happiness
    I wish you were here
    I need your smile
    My conscience
    My reason to live
    You've given so much
    I have nothing to offer.
    Please forgive me
    Soon I will give you everything.




    Submitted on 2011-04-24 18:18:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is curious to me, I have sentimental value connected with this piece. I wanted to name my unborn child Dartanian.

    This seems to me to be something like a mother speaking to her son, or I guess it could be a pet.

    Thanks for sharing.

    Jaz
    | Posted on 2011-12-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      this is beautiful. it feels relate-able as well. i like your style. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2011-04-27 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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