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    dots Submission Name: In Silencedots
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    Author: Doublefeather
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       Words are meant to be spoken at certain times.


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    dotsIn Silencedots
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    .Words that we couldn't bring ourselves to say,

    Even if they're for another's best.

    The laws of friendship demanded our inaction,

    And so our silence is filled with regret.



    Words that needed to spoken,

    But pride and pain,

    For retribution so called.

    So then our silence is filled with shame.



    Words spoken out of place,

    As annoyance enters the drum,

    Words of unintelligence pass our lips,

    So silence is filled with wisdom.



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    Submitted on 2011-04-24 20:05:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well done, when we speak, it should follow a time of thought. Will our words bring aid to another, satisfaction, or hurt and pain. Do we speak up to warn another of pitfalls in their road of life, or in silence, allow them to go deeper into trouble.
    1st, do no harm
    2nd,,,, help another when it is needed
    3rdkeep silent, the voice that would utter words of hatred, or bring sorrow unessesaryly.
    | Posted on 2011-04-26 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      I see what you mean. you are painting three different pictures here. Silence from different angles.

    Shows that there's a time for everything and right things done at the wrong time are equally wrong...like staying silent when you oght to speak and speaking when you should stay silent.

    I think you missed one word in the first line of th 2nd stanza...'Words that needed to be spoken'

    Anyways, Good job!
    | Posted on 2011-04-25 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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