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    dots Submission Name: The Unclaimed Dreamdots

    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Unclaimed Dreamdots

    I once dared to dream,

    A dream that has passed by.

    It left a broken heart,

    And the tears that I have cried.

    It sprouted wings,

    And flew away.

    It left the night,

    But stole the day.


    Idle hands bring idle tears,

    Idle feet,

    Idle fears.

    Idleness breeds false truths,

    For dreams are only fantasies until they are pursued.

    Submitted on 2011-04-24 20:26:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well done, the stuff of dreams can be made a reality, but only if they are persued with fervor. Many dreams never come to fruit, because the dreamer loses sight of their goal, wheather it be towards love or a better way of life.
    Never give up your dream, carry it in your heart, thus it may come true at a later time, under different circumstances, with another subject of dreams.
    | Posted on 2011-04-26 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Good advice

    I like how the poem seems to collapse in the middle,really goes with what you're trying to say there...like the words themselves are coming out lazily...idly. it adds up to make the structure more beautiful. Nice!
    | Posted on 2011-04-25 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]

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