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    dots Submission Name: Argentinadots
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    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsArgentinadots
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    What dreams, stilled by night's solace and the inflections flinching
    from words unspoken, freedom unwritten in the distance between two
    days ago and now, summer too long gone, the city a straining shadow
    of emptiness disguised as faces I hurriedly know, as bodies torn over
    the salt of denial and the urge for completion tarnishing each world
    reflected in stone and water. Perhaps, there is nothing to all of this,
    merely a stamen bending to the wind, trees stiffening silently
    amidst travellers seeking to become lost and forever lost
    to the whir of minutes becoming hours, becoming months
    pressed between page and four leaf clover. Although
    there is quiet, there is suffering heard from rooftops
    attuned with the heart to hear and know of this,
    this flailing complacency a sense that all
    will be destroyed before the day
    has come to flower.


    26/04/11

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      i like how you seem to be exploring more styles.(at least from what i remember you posting previously) anyhow good work. i know this is more a journal or w/e just poppin in i guess.
    | Posted on 2011-04-27 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2011-04-27 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like your endings...you create that sharp impact that leaves us pondering the poem long after we have read it...
    | Posted on 2011-04-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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