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    dots Submission Name: Untitleddots

    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 725
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 417

       Written 4/19/11

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    Questions up there....
    Up in the air...
    Like leaves recklessly kicked up towards the sun,
    Kicked by reckless little heels,
    Maybe just for fun,
    Or just for the way it feels.
    Maybe kicked just to see if those leaves are real.
    To watch those leaves flutter about in the warm spring wind,
    Kicked just to remember what it felt like to be a kid.

    Submitted on 2011-04-25 18:44:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I really enjoy the nursery rhyme aspect of this. The repetition, how the words are simple & the idea is too, & the rhyme moves it along just enough without the poem being adhered or limited by it.

    I don't know. It just moves nicely; made me smile to read it, thinking about my own inner child & the way it comes out sometimes, when given a sunny day, a swing set, a pile of leaves, etc. & I think achieved exactly what it wanted to in terms of how it was written & what it wanted to get out of the reader.
    | Posted on 2011-04-25 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]
      as we get older, we wish we could be more reckless again...but we know too much...we know what is under those leaves...we aren't as likely to jump into the pile...or to kick them...
    but sometimes we take the chance....just to feel like a kid again...

    i like the part of kicking them to see if they are real...

    we get older and wiser and sometimes so less trusting...

    part of me wants less simple in all the language in this...but part of me thinks the simplicity adds to the allure of this piece...

    i guess i'll kick it to see if it's real.

    | Posted on 2011-04-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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