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    dots Submission Name: A Petite Ariadots
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    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       For my daughter Madison


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    dotsA Petite Ariadots
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    When your eyes shine

    like the skyline

    you’re world

    clashes with mine

    you’re on cloud nine

    i’m of sound mind

    innocence grows

    like dayglo

    little heart beats

    gaining mothers heat

    tiny hands

    hold steady

    My arms rock in time like a metronome

    sleeping heavily you breathe on the up beats

    my petite aria

    languid and smooth




    Submitted on 2011-04-26 12:37:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very cute poem as is your daughter. Her image and your love for her is very well depicted in your verse. Kids arouse such lovely and immaculate feelings which is above everything in this world. Very tender write. I enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      tiny baby hands!!! I'm sorry i'm crazy about them. lol my mom used to sort of put ours against her lips because she loved them too.

    Anyway, i liked this... except i don't think "metronome" fits in there. I mean its meaning fits but .. i dunno.
    Keep it up :)

    Black Rose
    | Posted on 2011-04-26 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]


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