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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 275
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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    Fallout

    Paint the wickedness in your heart
    Pencil sketch around the love
    In lines of grey
    The paper cuts
    With the coloured inks of burning blood

    And tearful aches
    The wretched path
    Spat upon the grave
    At last
    Existence an excuse to survive
    We were here, we weren’t alive
    And there’s nothing else to prove

    Bury me and I’ll bury you

    So it’s fallout in your name
    There’s no redemption, we’re all the same
    Another twisted mirror of the truth

    Bury me, I’ll bury you
    There’s nothing else to prove

    Stretch the mediocre to breaking point
    They scream in silence
    While entertainment makes them laugh
    The coloured inks their wretched path
    Searching for …………………..
    Searching for …………………..
    And it’s all a joke to you
    Existence was the life you knew
    Being born does not mean you are alive
    We just came here to survive

    But there’s nothing else to prove
    Bury me, I’ll bury you

    I held my hand out to the sky
    If just once to look into that universal eye
    To break the taste of salt upon my tongue
    And see all your wretched worthless dreams undone
    Paint the wickedness in my heart
    I pencil sketched around my love
    With coloured inks in burning blood
    Every tear
    The paper cuts
    And by acceptance define your love

    But you had nothing left to prove
    You had nothing else to do
    You just came here to survive
    Just to prove you were alive

    Bury me and I’ll bury you

    What else are we supposed to do








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      An excuse to survive, we were here, we weren't alive, and theres nothing else to prove.

    Love it!
    | Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very dark, deep, and touching. i related to it in that your words seemed to fit my feelings, feelings that i never told anyone because i couldn't describe them. you have. this is beautiful. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2011-04-27 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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