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    dots Submission Name: Voodoo Dolldots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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    dotsVoodoo Dolldots
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    Voodoo Doll


    Some image of hate or frustration
    The needles anguish you may have chosen
    To stick and jab
    In a collective spasm

    The agreement to solicit such action
    And beat onto the wall of prejudice
    The same nails you are crucified with

    Some sacrificial lamb to carry our burden
    The complicit blindness we accepted
    Was someone else’s oppression

    The fine wine and sumptuous celebration
    We were belly full
    On their starvation

    But we will weave the spell of the Voodoo Doll
    And hate it as much
    In case we turn that same hate upon ourselves
    We will not dare to look into the eye
    Of a luxury bought
    By the empty stomachs of children

    No

    We will choose the ragged doll
    The faceless and nameless
    With which to beat back the stabs of conscience

    We will seek relief in pins and media incantations
    We will sing the hymn of hate
    And burn the Voodoo Doll

    We will accuse everyone
    And anyone
    To avoid accusing ourselves

    While every ounce of petty desire needs to be fulfilled
    And the craving for more titillates this bored and uninspired ….. imagination
    So pushed to the back of our collective mind
    Walks the living, breathing, little brown person …. skeleton
    And every mouthful, so sweet with instant gratification

    Is a mouthful of ash
    In our soul

    Did you forget your soul ?

    It is your very own Voodoo Doll






    Submitted on 2011-04-26 13:31:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like your stuff! Your use of symbol and imagery is just....pro
    | Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      I cant say I appreciated the weight of every line but I simply bowed when I read " we fed full on thier stavation and also every sweet mouthful with instant gratias was a mouthful of ash,gee u write swell those were my best lines even got me formin or copyin lines like" we laughed ourselves numb on their sense of gloom"see I live ur page on go to my page to pen! lol
    | Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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