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    dots Submission Name: Potential + You = ONEdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 457
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    dotsPotential + You = ONEdots
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    Potential + You = ONE


    Where did I go
    Through the birth canal of myself
    I emerged
    Emerged, immersed in a divine expression
    A divine purpose of being

    Like you, I opened my eyes
    I became myself, tiny, vulnerable, we were
    And yet so full
    So teaming to the cup if living
    Overflowing
    With potential

    Where did it go

    How did we lose it
    Did it become fragmented in so many wild eyed
    Childish figments
    Those fantasies and dreams that filled our world
    And all the things we saw
    How we were triggered
    And held by the brightness of it all

    Was it then, did we lose it then, while playing too often
    Laughing too loudly
    Swinging wild in abandonment
    Back then
    When everyone, everyone was our friend

    I recall, having so many friends

    Those first days at school and two plus two
    Stand in line
    And punishments for the crime, of giggling
    Algebra, History and geography
    Silence in class and no talking freely
    And endless hours of TV
    The First World War, the Second World War
    All of a sudden seemed important to me

    School, filled with innuendo and ridicule
    Teacher tyrants worse the playground bullies
    And suddenly thrust into a world of violence
    Acquiescence to authority

    Feel myself vanishing slowly

    Can’t even remember who I was
    When I smoked my first cigarette
    Or staggered home drunk from my first illicit pint
    I was just a name
    A someone who thought he needs to be a man
    And assume all the attitudes
    Everyone around me told me I should assume

    Where did I go, who was I now
    My brain filled with educational nonsense
    My senses stripped
    To a point of numbness
    I knew nothing, but everything, anymore
    And all I had to be afraid of
    Was the law

    And so, all potential, became a focus focused
    In the fatness of a wage packet
    And I sought to define my limited world
    By all the things this money I earned
    Bright spanking accoutrements and hourly entertainments
    And when the pressure got too much
    Get pissed
    Get stoned
    Get laid

    And from somewhere in back of me
    From behind the me
    From inside the me
    There was the me
    The real me
    Who was me
    Watched me
    Fade

    Where did I go
    Through the birth canal of myself
    I emerged
    Emerged, immersed in a divine expression
    A divine purpose of being

    Like you, I opened my eyes
    I became myself, tiny, vulnerable, we are
    And yet so full
    So teaming to the cup if living
    Overflowing
    With potential







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