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    dots Submission Name: Death of Timedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDeath of Timedots
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    Fate playing with time
    Not playing very kind.
    Breaking innocent time down
    Unweaving Father time’s gown.
    Disrobing thee old man
    Taking the clock from his hand.
    Clock hands racing around
    Heart beating "Tick, Tock" as it pounds.
    Gizmos keep it in beat
    Surpassing human feat.
    Suddenly, the clock stops
    Father time goes down with a flop.
    Now, everything is dark
    Stopping the clock which is my heart.




    Submitted on 2004-02-14 14:35:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      theres always something about ending, that captivates me in poems. this, like so many i read, in fact nearly all i read, incorperates it.
    i like it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      reading through your past posts, i like this one the best. it captures time very well in words as it is a hard thing to write about exclusively.
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. that was a nice twist at the end.! i like this one... kinda makes all the images going backward in your mind... time erasing itself!!.. nice work!!
    | Posted on 2004-02-14 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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