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    dots Submission Name: The Directiondots

    Author: Dolor
    ASL Info:    21/m
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 129/158/79
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Directiondots

    standing in streets, blindfolded
    skylight pierces dark
    But we stood, laughing at God.

    Submitted on 2011-04-27 02:42:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i guess that it A direction. i don't know about THE direction. unless there is some sort of personal experience this is based on. but i guess this is a direction. idk would this be considered a reverse senru(don't know how to spell that one apparently)? well written, interesting words, like the format idea.
    | Posted on 2011-04-27 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      we don't know where we're going, we don't know how we got there, but we don't care...we just have to laugh---nothing much else we can do...

    sometimes we feel like God's cruel joke and can only laugh at ourselves for how much we screwed up...

    this is like reverse haiku...7-5-7--

    i always like when forms get violated...and haikus are generally about nature...but this is about the nature of ourselves...the nature of humanity...
    "skylight pierces dark" but even the daylight doesn't help us see the truth...we are still blind...perhaps with blindfolds we put on ourselves...

    and it is a good read...less is more...

    | Posted on 2011-04-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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