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    dots Submission Name: Human?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 512
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsHuman?dots
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    This pain brings me to my knees
    As the memories bring tears to my eyes
    Living with these vivid reminders daily
    Seeing the scars I have caused myself
    I live with it all
    Constantly pushing through my pain
    Struggling with my lively demons
    I am!
    Lying awake consoling myself
    Crying till no more tears surface
    Losing the battle
    I am
    Wondering why the culprits to my pain do not suffer?
    Wanting to know what makes them human?
    Humane enough to abuse a helpless innocent child?
    Why are they allow to live..
    Free from pain
    Free from scars
    Free from such emotional burdens I carry?!




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      So sad, that there are "humans" who can do so much wrong here on earth, yet will only experience justice after their demise.
    The jjudgement of FATHER will be harsh for them, who have brought harm and pain to one of his children.
    A very well written piece on a sorrowful subject.
    | Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]


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