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    dots Submission Name: YOU!!dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Fanfic/I hate you
    Total Views: 421
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       Mother you have made me this un loveable unlikeable person i'll never stop i'll never give up i'll keep pushing forward


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    I am fighting to make it far
    Unlike what you did
    Working too many hours
    To prove you wrong
    Taking these college classes
    To be less like you
    My feet ach
    My back pulsates, sending pain down my spine
    Due to the night I decided my life needed to end
    Ultimately I pulled the trigger
    Now all that remains there is thick scar tissue that surrounds my fragile fractured spine
    Nevertheless I go on pushing through my pain
    Ignoring the memories
    Pretending my pain is only a figment of my imagination
    1am now
    My day is unwinding
    I wonder what pain you live with
    What kind of memories haunts you?
    Or do I haunt you at all?

    I live with unspeakable pain
    Pain you, Mother have caused me
    You left me … you walked away from me in my time of need
    Why could you not hear my cries?
    What do I did I do to make you hate me?
    Why can you not love me?




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      I never came to terms early enough to realise… I just went on expecin,believein my mother would love me, but today my adult mind has come to terms with the fact that not all who bore a child 9months can trully love that child,not all women with offsprings are mothers first tryto let go forget even when forgivin is hard or vice versa and healin frm inside will come,plus be a better mum,thats an even revenge for all unloving mums.
    | Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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