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    dots Submission Name: You don't even knowdots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 743
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       the most central idea that came to mind when i wrote this is that ignorance is truly bliss


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    How do you sleep at night
    Do you know I have such anger
    The world I could smite
    Do you know
    When I'm in fright
    My nails I bite
    Or when I'm angry, frustrated, or in love
    I write
    Where were you
    When my poems I did recite
    When my college acceptance letter came
    And I was filled with excite
    Graduation, the spark in my eyes did ignite
    My boyfriend
    Who I love and adore
    Who is my white knight
    Do you know about him?
    Do you know I want study pharmacy?
    Or that I tell jokes that are a bit racy?
    Do you know my hair has been blonde, red, green, blue, even pink?
    Do you even think
    About me?
    Do you know how old I am?
    Now that you don't have to pay for it?
    Do you remember my day of birth
    Or was it burnt in the fiery hearth
    With what was our relationships
    Well thanks to the internet
    I need not fret
    Where you were
    Because now I know
    While I was left in the dark
    You lived life to the fullest
    Living ramped and wild
    Like a exited shark
    Executive chef is your job
    I bet you act like a snob
    You had girlfriends
    Young and thin
    Always put on your face
    A grin
    Tickling the hair on your chinny chin chin
    You were living a life of travel
    Dubia, Egypt
    Keiv in the Ukraine
    Some place called Riga
    I have no idea in my brain
    Where that is
    The Louve in France
    Swam black sea
    Even went to BALI
    All without me
    Why cant you see
    All the great things I can be
    You can call me sweet pea
    All you want
    Even though you haven't in about six years
    But you will never know
    That I can scream like a banshee
    I don't like curry
    That my dream is to live a life happy and free
    That I hope to graduate with a biochemistry degree
    That I love green tea
    The boy that I might marry
    You might live a glamorous life
    Executive chef
    Extravagant travels
    Beautiful women
    Adventure that I don't even know
    But even with all these pleasures
    The best thing you missed out on
    Was me




    Submitted on 2011-04-29 01:32:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow.. i cant say that i know how you feel, cause ive never been in your shoes. but i do know how it feels to have an absent father. this is a very strong piece.. good write & i love it!
    | Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Is it your dad you wrote this for? if so he sure is missing out! it's a shame when they don't know such little details like how you like your tea or how you laugh or cry or scream...such little details of life...little but so important because it's us..who we are..and they don't know that. they don't know who we are.
    nice piece!
    | Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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