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    dots Submission Name: memories&feelingsdots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    i take my clothes off
    and i turn out the light
    i say my prayers
    and start to say goodnight
    but like always the memories assault me
    they remind me of all that ive forgotten
    like the way your lips tasted after the summer rain
    or how your hands felt on my face
    with the memories, feelings always follow
    the love that i thought was true
    swallows me up, fills me up
    breaks me in two
    love is always associated by pain
    so its no accident that all of that was in vain
    you used me and dried me out
    and to think you used to say you knew what it was all about
    its funny how all these years later
    i still dream of you at night
    its only bits and pieces now
    cause my brain is all but full up
    and i try and try to push them out
    but my tender heart just cant say goodbye
    its no young girl standing here anymore
    im weathered, ive changed
    i grew up and i moved away
    but still my memories turn me into that 15 yearold
    begging and pleading for you to return.




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      I really can relate to this. I love all of it except for this line:

    "but still my memories turn me into that 15 yearold"

    Maybe you could say something like:

    "Still yet my memories wish for my youth once again,"

    Just a suggestion, it is the 15 year old makes the line seem out of place. But I still love the poem.
    | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      hey nice write oh 15 years old that was to many years ago to remember lol

    i guess most people fall in love in the young teenage years when you look at each one they all tell a story
    nice write

    sandman
    | Posted on 2011-05-03 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      First love and its memories are always hard to take out of your mind and soul. You just imbibe them and they become part of you and your life. Love always bring anguish as roses are always with thorns. Good poem.
    | Posted on 2011-05-01 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Were you 15 when you met your first love???Wow, I was 15 when i first fell in love..and i don't know if it's because i was young and naive, but it seems it was a big mistake.
    i understand because after all these years,i still have the memories. i can still remember my first kiss in the backseat of a bus (haha).
    He's married now but we're still friends. i guess it was just not meant to be...
    Nice piece!
    | Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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