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Good Morning, Alabama

Author: Runes
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Good Morning, Alabama

Alabama got the biggest blow-job in the history
of screw-you-fuckeries... whole buildings disappeared
and the trees bowed over and shook themselves
like they were seducing kings with a dance of Salome...

Alabama with her fallen stars can no longer glitter
when the sun goes down. But when the morning comes,
she still wakes up green, stretching for miles
despite the sunlit mess.

We should all wake up so well...

Submitted on 2011-04-29 14:11:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  and others should wake up and read this piece...a state ignored...both literally and figuratively...the state itself and the state of mind this poem produces..

i really like this poem muchly.
| Posted on 2011-05-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  "like they were seducing kings with the dance of Salome"

great line...nice imagery...

i like the beginning of this...harsh language, pornographic like what happened there...good analogy..

and then this the aftermath..there will be blue skies...there will be dawns...and there will be green grass...amidst all of the devastation , the day wakes itself up no matter what...

and those folks will pick up the pieces and move on..

i like the last line...and it reminds me how lucky we were Wednesday night...5 funnel clouds spotted in the area, one touched down but then lifted off the ground and didn't come back down..we have had awful flooding, hail damage and wind damage but nothing like those folks experienced...

we always look our own problems and cry...but god, if we look at others who have it so much worse...maybe we would breathe more sighs of relief and be thankful.

| Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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