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steamed


Author: scardnscared
ASL Info:    25/ DFW
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Words: 193
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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steamed



everyman i hold in my arms
is just another notch on my post
and everytime i scream
its always your name in the back of my mind
and no one forgets you
but god knows we've all tried
and sometimes nothing makes sense
and i try to iron out the kinks in my life
but i still think back to that one memory
were you said i would never be good enough
well i guess ive proved myself
cause ive thrown myself in every mans arms
just so i can say that they all want me
but the numbers they rack up
and my self esteem sometimes falls
cause i can see the desire
never the love
shining in their eyes
so how can i back track
how can i get back to that first mistake
.. i cant
and it kills me cause i wish i could do it differently
i wish i didnt do it at all
i should of known that you only said those things
cause deep inside you loved me
and didnt want to see me go
but you've got a horribly fucking wrong way
of loving me.




Submitted on 2011-04-29 16:29:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Men huh! They turn life into a botched up crossword and then brag about it. sorry, i am just angry.

And it may be dangerous because i am alone with my strong, capricious anger.

Thanks for sharing this really meaningful poem.
| Posted on 2011-06-02 00:00:00 | by Kaddish | [ Reply to This ]
  really tells the effects words have on us. especially when it comes from someone close so many times. it stays in our memories and changes the way we see ourselves and view life. yeah, most times, women feel a little wanted and a little powerful when they're with men who desperately want their bodies. but that's all they want, their bodies.
| Posted on 2011-04-29 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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