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    dots Submission Name: What To Do?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
    Total Views: 322
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       We are living two differerent lives right now he has kids a career I'm not a parent and am in college to get my career...


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    dotsWhat To Do?dots
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    How do I make something work if it's not meant to?
    Even though in my heart I wish for it work with all my might!
    We no longer have the time we once did for each other
    Occasionally we'll have a day to spend together
    Otherwise we've got our own lives
    Living them separately, yet living together
    Seeing you more as my roommate rather than my lover
    Looking for someone to turn too and its no longer you...
    Where did we go wrong?
    I love you yet we're no longer "in love"
    Why is this?
    I just want to rewind the hands of time
    Fix the mistakes I've made
    To be sure I would never be writing a poem such as this..
    My heart is hurting and I have no one to turn to
    No one to go to...




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