I would fix

Author: bigohhh1 ASL Info:    31/M/Fl Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 25 /21 /37 Words: 137

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I would fix

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You would have been better off Not to have kissed me Not to have lived with me for so long My heart is so done I feel like I am cheating two years later And I have placed you in a position To expect more from this world Than what has been dealt I only wanted my soul To know you better And now it does And I feel I will never be the same And you lay somewhere in the worst kind of pain You are my heroin I am not your Hero But I would fix I would fix it I would fix you and I I would if it would fix but there is no fix so I expected more from this world too I apologize

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Some times there are happenings in our lives that cannot be fixed or found again, when they are lost. This was a sad story, one that is known by many other hearts. Your expressin of loss and pain was well written.

| Posted on 2011-05-01 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]

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