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I would fix

Author: bigohhh1
ASL Info:    31/M/Fl
Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 25 /21 /37
Words: 137
Class/Type: Prose /Longing
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I would fix

You would have been better off
Not to have kissed me
Not to have lived with me for so long
My heart is so done
I feel like I am cheating two years later
And I have placed you in a position
To expect more from this world
Than what has been dealt
I only wanted my soul
To know you better
And now it does
And I feel I will never be the same
And you lay somewhere in the worst kind of pain
You are my heroin
I am not your Hero
But I would fix
I would fix it
I would fix you and I
I would if it would fix
but there is no fix
so I expected more from this world too
I apologize

Submitted on 2011-05-01 13:18:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Some times there are happenings in our lives that cannot be fixed or found again, when they are lost.
This was a sad story, one that is known by many other hearts.
Your expressin of loss and pain was well written.
| Posted on 2011-05-01 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]

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