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    dots Submission Name: Missing Grandpadots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/The pain inside
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    dotsMissing Grandpadots
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    I hold your ashes in my hand...its the last thing I have of you...Knowing its all ill ever be able to hold again just kills me in the most harsh way...I miss the sound of your voice..the gleam in your eye the supportive words you would tell me every single day to keep me going...The pain has gotten easier...I have a hard time believing its been 6 months since I last touched your hand and told you goodbye...Days like today if feels like it was just yesterday that I had to watch you fade away to your current stage of life...I miss you more then I could ever cry a tear for..I wish for the days to pass by so I can see you again...but what am I to do or say...I have begun to live again...




    Submitted on 2011-05-02 18:04:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i noticed that you called it "current stage of life". thats a unique but healthy attitude. he stll exists and still loves you but at a more delicate level.

    this piece was a brimful of emotions and i felt them.
    | Posted on 2011-05-03 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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