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    dots Submission Name: In Denial dots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsIn Denial dots
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    My mind has closed,
    Chapters of my life,
    And exposed,
    Bitter truths,
    That made me cry;

    Though it hurts to breathe,
    I still inhale to believe,
    That I'm still here to retrieve,
    Forgiveness before I leave,
    The world of flesh in which I live.

    Many people have spoke,
    Words of damnation,
    Yet in a cloud of smoke,
    I choked them all,
    In my imagination.

    Now the battle I fight,
    Lies in a long awaited while,
    Knowing one day I might,
    Stop living in denial.




    Submitted on 2011-05-02 22:48:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh! Thats sad. you should stop living in deniel right here, right now. it is all about shifting the focus from bitter to better aspects of your life. life is always precious.

    The poem flows nicely anyway and one can feel the pain.
    | Posted on 2011-05-03 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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