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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: DarkGunslinger
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 7/25/23
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       a rather odd song I wrote at about 5:30am.
    it probably isn't very good. I have no idea what I was writing about, though it'll probably come to me later and I'll write another better version.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    A sound

    like settling down

    tongues tied and passing sickness
    like lepers in delirium

    A walk

    slinky and full of shock

    legs will twist and lock up
    like broken puzzles

    A touch

    feverish, too much

    dead girl skin with boiling blood
    like a sinister trap


    bones jut like
    a dead scarecrow

    teeth break
    like silhouettes, oh

    you trap me
    like a wounded sparrow

    a ruthless arrow

    destroy me

    my time to be

    all that you see

    the bonds that hold you to seek

    and in this dark
    I find a heart
    to guide me far away

    and in this heart
    I'll find a man
    who'll lead me back
    lead me back to serve

    and in this spot
    I'll find a home
    to kill me again
    to kill it all away

    Submitted on 2011-05-03 04:31:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Seems to me you've found your inner serial killer :) Kudos
    | Posted on 2011-12-23 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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