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    dots Submission Name: running out of timedots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Im stuck out in the cold
    All the light has faded.
    I try to run to escape,
    But this storm follows me
    No matter where I go.

    I feel like Im losing time.
    All I see is these walls closing in on me.
    Im set to run to anywhere else,
    But where else could I go?

    This storm hasnt faded in years,
    Ive run out of places to hide,
    Ive run out of excuses to use.
    Its like Im up on stage, with no script.

    Its becoming so trying to hide,
    Never wanting them to see
    Praying no one notices the black cloud,
    Thats never far behind.

    I was all set to run again,
    Till I hit that brick wall.
    So far I fell, unable to force myself up,
    I felt so broken in that moment.

    I knew my running had ended,
    In the dark I couldnt see,
    Where had all the light gone?
    When was it that I felt carefree?

    Time had been running out
    Only I never noticed when I never stayed.
    In a new place I could pretend,
    Nothing could happen to me,
    Its why I always left.

    My day had come though,
    When it all came crashing down on me.
    The perfect storm behind that black cloud
    My time on the run didnt really work,
    When in the dark I still stayed,
    Just sitting here trying to see the light





    Submitted on 2011-05-03 16:20:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is overwhelming, this storm seems to be everywhere and appears to foresee your moves. a nice, breathless, rushing poem!
    | Posted on 2011-05-04 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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