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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
    Total Views: 405
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       I have no clue just rambling about nothing :-D


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    dotsTimedots
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    Today is one of those days
    Where the hands of time stops
    It is as if this time of the day drawls out like a blade
    You can cut the tension with a knife
    As it pierces your ears
    The blood drips
    Drip...
    Drip....
    Drip......
    Yes, it is going to be one of those days
    When you mind rewinds
    Taking you back to your darker days
    The memories living and feeding off the depression that seldomly kicks in
    Yet when it does, you best watch out!
    There's nothing out there for you
    Expect for the ringing in the ears, the blood splatter, and of course your depression
    Losing a handle on yourself you are!
    But whatch ya expect?
    When time drawls out like a blade
    When your memory takes you back to your darker days
    When the monster of depression takes a hold a ravages you!
    We're all loosing ourselves...
    Some just aren't strong enough to acknowledge this




    Submitted on 2011-05-06 07:30:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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