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    dots Submission Name: Mother's Day?? Whats That???dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Venting
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       I hate her!!!


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    dotsMother's Day?? Whats That???dots
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    Fuck this shit I hear on the radio
    Or the bull shit commercials I see on TV
    Sunday is just another PLAIN OLD SUNDAY to me
    FUCK MOTHER'S DAY
    WHAT'S THAT?
    I know I was adopted
    I am an ORFPIN

    I may as well had been,
    I bet you treat the dirt on the bottom of your shoes better than you treat me
    Looking the other way as he would touch me
    Putting on your blinders when you saw me crying out for you..
    YES you MOM!
    I look forward to the day you die
    So I can spit on your grave
    Then go celebrate!!
    You killed the little girl you once knew
    I hate you and as each day of my life passes me by
    And I do not hear from you
    I hate you even MORE
    You are that rotten part of me
    I cannot seem to get rid of!
    You.... Mother are MY worst ENEMY!
    And I WILL defeat YOU!!!!!




    Submitted on 2011-05-06 07:47:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate in that my father was abusive for awhile and my mother just stood and watched it happen. I, too, was adopted, and at a young age my father had severe anger issues and I was his punching bag. Our relationship is non-existent, and I would very much like to tell her things that you have so wonderfully expressed here.
    | Posted on 2011-05-10 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought there was gonna be a twist at the end, like Mom, it's not ALL your fault or something to that effect. I'm not sure what to say. It sounds honest. I like the cadence.
    | Posted on 2011-05-08 00:00:00 | by nolram | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa! There's so much hatred in there. A mother doesn't really have to be the one who gave birth to you. those who took care of you, fed you, gave you warmth, love, helped you grow up...they are all your mothers. and you, you are one too cos you have the love of a mother in you...the instinct, it's natural.
    It hurts me to read this much hatred in one piece, but hey it's good to vent it out. but i hope you'll be able to forgive her and get the healing you deserve...hatred is a deadly venom...you need to flash it out.
    Soon i will be a mother too and i cannot imagine not loving my baby cos i love him already!. we can never tell why some mothers give their children away or desert them but we must try not to repeat their mistakes. perhaps it was because they had hatred for some people that's why they did that so we must not be that bitter too.
    | Posted on 2011-05-06 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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