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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Frailty is the weakness.
    Forgotten is my crime.
    I pray with these hands,
    I pray for more time.

    Empty are these walls.
    Depressing and cold.
    Blank and bare,
    No stories to be told.

    As I ponder my thoughts,
    I grow weary of the game.
    Life is a game over,
    And always the same.

    People are people,
    Where ever you go.
    The sky is blue,
    And water will flow.

    For me I wander,
    Place to place.
    Looking for an end,
    To show my face.




    Submitted on 2011-05-06 16:33:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh and i like the picture you have up to sorry i had to put another comment up to say that
    | Posted on 2011-05-09 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Its hard for me to read poems and not just give compliments, i can hear the longing in this poem but im not sure what for i guess i relate to it like a longing to myself to be who i once was but feeling to lost that you don't think you'll ever see that person again. im probably wrong thats just how i feel when i read it, well i hope things look up for you i liked this poem
    good write
    ~jess~
    | Posted on 2011-05-09 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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