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    dots Submission Name: Turmoildots
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    Author: Skinwalker
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 36/57/28
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsTurmoildots
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    Bleeding through, falling out.
    Need help, About to shout.
    Stealing mem'ries, shaking knees.
    Above the whisper, I barely plead.
    I stand with granite, though cracked in foundation.
    I cannot gather my thoughts, due to the sensation.
    About to pierce through the womb,
    and gather unto life or a tomb.
    Crossroads of fate stare back at me.
    Which road to take? Time we all see.




    Submitted on 2011-05-07 02:37:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      so we pick ourselves up off the mat and go on with life....leaving the pain behind...starting over with what we have learned?

    or do we give in to the depression and end it...

    the reference to the womb is really good here...

    to be born or not to be born..or maybe reborn or not reborn...

    should we stay in the womb and avoid life...or come out and face it head on and grow from it...


    nice flow to this piece also, besides some pretty visual wording.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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