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    dots Submission Name: Nineteen Questionsdots

    Author: TiaanK
    ASL Info:    37/M/Dancing in the dark
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 22/27/28
    Words: 314
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsNineteen Questionsdots

    Where did this go wrong?
    Stroking my heartstrings like a fiddle
    The clock runs sideways in this song,
    composed with innuendos and riddles
    Puzzled; I feel like I belong
    Where did this go wrong?

    Where are you going my Dear?
    You stay, but you stay on the run
    I push you away, I want you near
    You come, I come undone
    You're my pleasure, my only fear
    Where are you going my Dear?

    Please tell me my little Girl?
    Just for once be honest about your lies
    This devil's dance as we swing n swirl
    I'm staring; blind in your eyes
    There's a filthy stain in this pure pearl
    Please tell me my little Girl?

    What's the problem my Sweetness?
    Why are you fighting me?
    I'm on your side of bitterness
    You break me, but I can't break free
    Do you really mean your deliberateness?
    What's the problem my Sweetness?

    What do we call this my Love?
    This two-step three steps backwards
    I've had it, and I can't get enough
    Your spade tongue flirts
    A clear path, clearly rough
    What do we call this my Love?

    Why do you do this my Queen?
    I keep holding my breath,
    but I find comfort in this torturing
    I can still taste your kiss of death
    Sweet lips, sweet dreams
    Why do you do this my Queen?

    What's your story my Baby?
    An open book in a foreign language
    Lost in translation: I want you to take me
    I am broken, you're damaged
    We make war, we make love, passionately
    What's your story my Baby?

    Who are we really my Only?
    Can you tell, because I don't know?
    Companions amongst the lonely,
    we set this darkness aglow
    You're mine and you still own me
    Who are we really my Only?

    - Tiaan Koekemoer 2009

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      Well this speaks of mistrust and distrust in love life?
    Well its too intimate for me to go into. I can relate to your deep felt sincere essence but cannot share it. you should come out and play a bit more with sunshine I think. And since this was in 2009 I sense that you have just done that.
    Take care Joachim
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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