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    dots Submission Name: my body is a cagedots

    Author: Theophilus
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 116/174/95
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       learning to love my dad instead of hating him means i have to be the bigger man and take his shots, words and sneers and anger like bullets, and instead of shooting back just taking it. and saying the hardest word in the world, "im sorry."

    Love is real and bigger- because God is Love and with Him behind me i can do this.

    amen, because this is a prayer, its a commitment, its something i really want to do. i want God to hold me accountable to this.

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    dotsmy body is a cagedots

    lets lay our pistols down
    im tired of hating you
    lets dip our feet in eachothers suffering
    and see that youre human just like me.

    we'll never be free
    until we learn to love
    so lets lay our pistols down.

    but if you wont lay yours down
    ill take the shots
    so maybe youll see
    what life can be.

    Love is real
    and He's bigger then any bullet wound
    ill take it
    ill be the bigger man
    if i need to be

    "im sorry"


    Submitted on 2011-05-07 21:54:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "He's bigger than any bullet wound"

    love is the answer isn't it?

    it takes so much more energy to hate, to be mad at someone---

    better to let it go....as you say "lay the pistols down"

    needs some apostrophes and "each other's"
    separated...but aside from that...

    this has a nice analogy that works...

    there is so much tension before a duel...and someone has to lose...sometimes both shooters lose...so let's just lay down the weapons (the words of anger and hate)

    and go have a beer at the saloon...

    | Posted on 2011-05-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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